It all started at a sunny beach in Asia.All packed with kids and parents with no room to spare.Casually walking on the warm,gold sand with the sun bursting its light upon the beach.Watching the blue,fresh sea glistering and reflecting the bright,shine of the big star.All of a sudden it all goes dark as if a enormous cloud’s shadow falls on to us.But the part that shocked me the most was the gigantic white and blue KLM Asia plane flies right above my nose.Not knowing what to do,I stand there in shock.Frozen dead in that spot,looking and waiting for the air force plane to swift pass us.
Thursday, September 27, 2018
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Hello Ariana, I really like your 100 word story. I like that you have got lots of describing words. Maybe next time you could do a more catchy title.
ReplyDeleteHi Ariana my name is Bella. I really like your 100 word story. I like the way you added lots of great detail and description. Next time you could tell me a little bit more about your story.
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Hi Ariana, my name is Italy and I am a year 7 from Marshland School. I really like that you have described your words it is awesome. Have you ever been to Asia? I have not. Maybe next time you should check your punctuation because I noticed that there were no spaces before you started a sentence.
ReplyDeleteHi I’m Billie-jo from Marshland school.I liked the way you added lots of detail and interesting words, it sounds like a brilliant piece of writing.This reminded me of a time that I went to a sunny beach.Next time you could maybe add a space in between the full stop and the words.
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